Could be much more refined.
I realise that you could not get other voice actors and I feel for you. But the predicament that this left you in hit the animation pretty hard. A lot of the voice acting just didn't hit the spot for most of the characters.
Altogether the plot took a long while to go very little distance. There was too much random things happening as well that distracted from anything meaningful and added nothing. The hot air balloon for one. Or the black teacher. For the distance the plot goes the 20+ min length was far too much to ask for people to sit through. I could see how the characters were parodies of japanese anime but the long school bit was very american in style and made the characters out of place.
There was no overall series structure given either. The main character had no big dream or even a goal. There was no love interests and the rivalry is very forced. There is also no greater threat established OR any relationship growth between deulist and morphemon. While these are not needed for a comedy flash they are all big parts of what I imagine you were parodying. So much material could have been drawn from these sources.
Some parts were good but the presentation and acting usually muted the impact of any comedy. I could see what you were getting at but there was a lot holding you back. And to say this was years in the making I would have expected something polished and refined. This just seems to fall flat in a lot of areas. Maybe even quickening the pace on this flash would have helped. It could have started off in school. The don't get their til about a third in.
Anyway I think this could have been greatly improved with better voice actors and better pacing. You didn't need to explain everyones background in one episode. Characters usually get their own episode for background exploration. And I understand if you could not get other voice actors but it is still a fact that the lack of them was a big flaw in the animation. For me it was the biggest.
So i should have cut everything before the school and separated each character development into it's own episode? So you'd have me making 2 minute episodes developing characters people don't have any reason to care about.
This animation is obviously inspired by egoraptor but I won't mark you down for that at all. I think it is a good thing.
The art itself was very fitting but the whole thing seemed like a disjointed rant that made no sense and there was the pointless nudity as well. A lot of the lines also degraded into inane mumbling. It started off strong though but it kept going on and on like that.
A short epic!
I don't get it but the silliness of it all was amazing! Keep it up.
So much promise.
Yeah it is a low rating for what is a good game. But the thing is that the art quality is so bad and you have released them so quickly. It shows you have the time to make it better. Also voice acting is terrible. Maybe try finding people who would do acting or art for you. This just isn't working.
You actually think I'm making each of these in 2 days. That's hilarious.
This was a very buggy game when I played it. Like the space bar prompt came up but when I pressed it nothing happened. Or a dialogue from the first guard was up when I entered a different room but without the background so it was just text over the screen. Or I left one room to appear at the entrance of another room. And lastly two speech files played at once making it sound ridiculous. I know that it was a 72 hour challenge but I wasn't even trying to break the game these things just happened.
they are fixed, now newgrounds have to update, thanks for reviewing anyway :)
Good flash clone!
It was a good game with original ideas in it but at the same time you could have credited "Geometry Wars". This is because people are crediting you for the wonderful colours and music choice which just copy the style used in the "Geometry Wars" series. You even used the same spaceship.
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